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[Gone with the Wind]

Interesting.

A picture showing some kind of a natural disaster, one would suppose.

I'd like to start with the darkness issue. It's too dark. I know you want to give it a dark atmosphere, but I can hardly see anything save for the lightning and the moon. It needs to be more nitid so that people can see the rest of the picture clearly.

The moon is nice, shining lustrously. A flaw I detected about that however is that the light gets in front of the mountain, or hill, whichever you prefer. The moon is understandably supposed to be behind the hill, so make it so that it shines behind it.

A tornado is seen destroying a farmhouse, the busticated pieces swirling in the wind. I like that, but I think that if you give the tornado a more helical shape, and some other stuff (like pieces of wood) flying around it, it'd me more realistic and thusly, more disastrous.

The farmhouse is not bad, but I think that the colors of the metal boards are a bit sloppy. A linear color starting from white and extending to black is never good, it's something that you would never see in real life. Try keeping the black part more whitish or grayish.

As for the lightning however, personally I didn't like it. It looks like a very long, twisted fork. I suggest you make it upside down instead, with more lightning bolts extending from it. The idea is there, it just needs some modification.

If you look closely, by the way, the grass looks bland and awkward. I suggest you add some texture, like grown grass or flowers.

Onwards to the miscellaneous details, I really like how the tractor looks. The sky color is there, gives the picture a dark atmosphere.

In overall examination, it's a nice picture save for a few easily fixable flaws. Out of a score of 10, I took off:
-1 for the absence of a few vital details, such as grass texture and lightning bolts
-1 for a few sloppy choices of colors
-1 for the logical fallacy of the moon light getting ahead of the hill
-1 for the inappropriate amount of darkness

6/10. This has a lot of potential to be a masterpiece, keep it up.

~Review Request Club

MCarsten responds:

Wow, thanks for the awesome review mrty. And I already fixed the moon glitch and the thunder bolt looking, if you're not seeing this fixed, is because was not yet placed.

1. About the darkness is because possible raining or storm, the tornado, striking from bolts and dust and pieces of destruction from the farmbarn.

2. Moon fixed.

3. About the tornado, I did a more linear color on it, for it looks from more light to dark in horizontal, for me it gives a looking from circular funnel and about the wood pieces, I already did this, these are the flying wrecks.

4. Thanks for the advice, and I don't like linear color too hehe, but I did this, to don't be so black on the image.

5. Fixed.

6. Thanks for the advice.

7. Thanks for like the tractor, and I was trying to do it looks more attached to the atmosphere so I think I did good on this! =)

8. I'll be fixing, but in my opnion, continue with the darkness it will really show that this is a catastrophic natural disaster.

9. Thanks for the amazing review!

SpyS.

[Boring 101]

Rushed.

The word came to me as soon as I saw this: 'rushed'. That's what I think about all of your pictures, anyway.

I'm sorry to say that it's really poorly done. The man is almost taller than the door, for one. The doorknob is a single touch of the brush tool and nothing more. Everything is just bland.

The man is dreadful. You drew an ear to him for the sole purpose of drawing an ear, it's only a few inches near his eye, it needs to be much further. The glasses look like they were crushed by a car. The nose is probably the worst, it needs to be much, much narrower. The moustache has the same problem. Why am I getting a feeling that you gave him a moustache like that just to cover his mouth, which you say you aren't good at?

The clothes need much more effort, too. What is he wearing on the top, a sleeveless sweatshirt? Seems sleeveless to me. The hand is very small and simple. The book is all curly and there is no way on earth someone would hold a book like THAT. Furthermore, the shoes are extraordinarily small.

There is absolutely no sense of proportion in this. If the man curls his right arm fully, his hand can touch the ground.

By the way, why does it still have the overflowing problem? Likewise, the ear looks like anything BUT an ear, so I'll be taking off points for that too.

Serious work is needed on this. You can't expect to make something good in a few days' work. You really have nothing to lose by giving it a week more. DO NOT RUSH. Rushing will only result in self-punishment. Keep improving it until you really feel that it's ready.

Out of 10, I took off:
-1 for the blandness
-2 for the incredibly poor proportions
-2 for the fill overflowing
-3 for the effortlessness

3 out of 10 means there's still hope. I repeat, DO NOT RUSH. Spend more time and effort on your artwork, take it seriously.

Keep practicing.
~Review Request Club

up-a-notch responds:

umm just to tell you i make my drawings in like 20 minutes not days...ADD

[Sea in a Coconut]

Spectacular.

I enjoy admiring your work after Alone, and you didn't disappoint me.

It's a stupendous drawing once again, with brightening colors and decent, realistic lines. The mosaic tile pattern of the sky is highly creative and marvelous, bringing a new dimension to this piece. Once again, I truly can't find anything to improve here.

Speaking story-wise, it shows a man and a woman, lovers I presume, in a coconut shell floating in the sea. I don't know why but they remind me of Adam and Eve. There is the same 'nature book' at the edge of the coconut shell. They are apparently getting away from a deserted island, sailing in a dangerous sea or ocean. Wilson the Volleyball is a nice reference, swimming towards the shell. This might mean that it's the same ocean as the one in Cast Away. Far away in the background there is a silhouette of a ship(?) attacked by some sort of a sea monster, maybe a kraken.

In spite of my positive review, I couldn't help but notice that the apple and the shark on the back are the same size, while they seem to be alongside each other. I don't know whether this is a perspective error or not, but frankly I can't really see a reason why it would be done on purpose. Nevertheless, I still won't take off points for that, as there are so many supernatural elements in this picture, and that may be one of them.

Overall, good job once again. I'm all for creative pieces of artwork like these, so don't be shy to request them in the club if you have others like these. Or any kind of other picture for that matter.

By the way, just today I realized that apples do float in water, so you have my apologies for that. :)

10/10, 5/5. Keep up the good work.
~Review Request Club

Merol responds:

Glad it didn't dissapoint you.

That thing being attacked by a monster is not a ship, are two ships actually, if you look closer, you can notice that one is in his tentacles already.

And the apple being as big as the whale, well, those guys are inside of a giant coconut shell, it wouldn't be strange if there were other giant fruits.

I've asked for some reviews before actually, but thanks!!!

No problem about the apples :D

THANKS A LOT MAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Alone]

Outstanding.

I'm not sure what this picture is trying to tell, but a picture speaks a thousand words, and I believe it speaks different words to everyone, just like a poem. I'll tell you what it speaks to me.

This woman is a nature lover who is sick of the world around her. Sick of urbanization, I presume, from the cut-down trees and lack of natural attributes in the vicinity. She's tired of trees being cut down and plants being perished, the world losing its greens and gaining grays. Her lack of fancy or flamboyant clothes also hints to her lack of urbanization.

She is alone because there is nobody to side with her in her fascination of nature, all her friends (if she had any to start with) and family members succumbed to the magic of urbanization. She may be dropping her book (a book about nature, it seems) because she's giving up on life, the falling of book foreshadowing her fate. The fact that she's standing near the water, and the water being a typical choice for suicide also hints to her suicidal thoughts. The apple swimming in the water might represent nature, swimming slowly away from the city and into a sea, only to sink deep down and get lost in there forever.

There really doesn't seem to be anything to improve here, though I can't help but notice that the apple doesn't sink in the water. There don't seem to be any trees around, so the picture can't be the moment of the apple making contact with the water. If it isn't a fallacy, I think I can see why: some parts of the nature always stay with the world. They don't sink. The firm tree in the background might also support this hypothesis.

Moving away from the story, everything about this picture is just excellent. The lines are decent, the colors are brightening, the shadowing is suitable, etc etc.

Keep up the good work, I really liked this. It deserves a nice place in my "favorite art" list.

10 out of 10, 5 out of 5. Good job.

~Review Request Club

Merol responds:

Well, it's very interesting how you created a whole story just from a little picture. You're right when you say that it speaks different words to everyone, since it tells something mostly different for me, but I won't tell you what because your history is just too great!!!

About the book, maybe it's a book about nature, maybe not, I'll just tell you that the picture is kind of related to some more of my draws, and I won't tell you anything else because i'm curious about what they will speak to you (if you see them).

And, at the risk of screw up the magic, I'm pretty sure that apples float on the water, so, I see no reason for it to sink deep down.

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! and congratulations because I think you have lots of imagination. (Also, it's AWESOME that you added this in your favorites)

[John Lennon]

Better than your others so far.

The thing I liked most about this piece is the hair. It's detailed, though I suggest you add more of those 'V's on his hair.

A major problem presents itself when you take his glasses to close examination. The rims aren't as circular as they are supposed to be, they are curly. Once again, I suggest you use the circle drawing tool instead of the brush tool when drawing circles. Additionally, try drawing the middle line (the line that connects the rims) a little downer.

The nose is also a problem. Apparently you drew the right part (from the viewer's perspective) after you drew the rest of the nose. You should make the nose more symmetrical, or for the very least, just erase that line between the right part of the nose and the entire thing. Likewise, the right nostril looks odd.

Onwards to the two problems that I keep encountering in your pictures. The first is the fill overflow. I'm reluctant to repeat this, as it's becoming redundant, but to put it in one sentence, the colors overflow their fills and paint a bit of the outside area. Unless you have a logical reasoning to do that on purpose, I'm hoping not to see this problem again in your future pictures. This opinion of mine also applies to the problem in the paragraph below.

The second problem is the fact that he doesn't have ears. This is common in your artworks and I'm not sure why. The picture will look far more real if you add some ears to him.

Moreover, I suggest you add some details to the mouth. Just drawing a line instead of the mouth is a common mistake, he needs a pair of lips. Especially given that this is a portrait, the face details are more important in this case.

Overall it's an OK portrait with a few easy-to-solve problems. If you are still doing this in Photoshop, I strongly advise you move on to Flash, or some other drawing problem provided it isn't MS Paint. True to its name, Photoshop is for editing photos, drawing something from scratch on it isn't a bright idea.

Out of 10, I took 1 point per each problem I mentioned, leaving you with a 5. Here's a warning though: if the two repeating problems I mentioned above really keep repeating, I'll start taking off more points. If you have a logical argument to keep repeating them then that's fine, but otherwise I'll have to do what's fair and get more critical.

Keep practicing, you are on the right track.
~Review Request Club

up-a-notch responds:

1. i suck at drawing lips

2. i like that outside the lines look

3. i tried the nose the other way...i don't like how it looks

4. try looking up people drawing in photoshop on youtube

also...thanks for the review

[Mr. Monocle]

Really bad.

Like I already mentioned in my review to your Sleepy Head, I believe its name was, picture, the colors are over-flowing their fills. That's a major issue, it's just ugly. The colors are mixed up in each other.

The sun is weird, it looks like Moon colored in yellow, and its rays are made of little triangles. The clouds look like they are on the same height as the man, and something is odd about the outlines. I don't know what to say about the sky, it looks nice in a way but the lines give it a kinky look. The ground has the same problem.

Onwards to the man, he's probably the worst part of the drawing, which is sad as he's the focal point. The hands are so small, the arms are so thin, and the necktie looks like it's been scratched by a cat. The face is the worst. The nose takes up eighty percent of his face, and the moustache looks like it's grown out of his nostrils. I hope that's not meant to be his nose hair... The eyes are all weird, the monocle doesn't look like a monocle at all. There is only one, bizarre ear, assuming that it's an ear that is. The hat is in a position that it won't be able to stand in real life.

I'm sorry but so many is wrong with this that I can only give you a 1 out of 10. It looks like something that a first grader would draw. You need much more practice.

~Review Request Club

up-a-notch responds:

its a friggin drawing you friggin jerk god what the hell stop trying to judge me like that ok! i try to be better I just like the style! ok! in fact I like this drawing! sooooooorry if you don't like my style! thats your problem not mine!

....sorry for freaking out...just needed to vent

[Sleepy Head]

Has potential.

I'm sorry that the first review you get on this is a bad one, but what good is a review if it isn't honest? There is no perspective, the clock looks like it's on the wall but it seems closer to the viewer than the bed. The horizon line is curled, it seems like no effort at all was spent on it. The clock also has 10 dots instead of 12. Every line is curly in fact, my theory is that you drew this with a mouse, not a tablet. Either way, I'd advise drawing the lines with the Line Tool instead of the brush.

The colors overflow their fills, especially if you take a look at the bed. There's some brown on the ground below a foot of the bed, some white underneath the bed sheets, pink under the man's slippers, so many more... The floor also looks awkward, really bizarre, with various mismatching colors mixed into it.

There is no measuring, none at all. I hope you aren't planning to use "this is just a cartoon, who cares?" (as cartoons don't usually have perspective or measuring) as an excuse, this is sloppy even for a cartoon.

As for the focal point, the man I mean... The drawing has plenty of potential, I take it you understandably spent most of the effort there. Except for the overflowing of the colors and the fact that he doesn't have ears, he's actually drawn pretty good.

You might also consider doing some shading. One of the most important things I learned about Flash (you did this in Flash, right?) is that shading makes objects look much, much better.

I assume this is some of your beginner works, and it's not that bad. My advice? Spend the effort you spent on the man on the rest of the picture. Just spend more time on it.

Out of 10 points, I'm giving you a 5, because it has plenty of potential and you seem to be a beginner.

Never give up. I'm looking forward to seeing you ameliorating.

~Review Request Club

up-a-notch responds:

...it was made in photoshop, also thanks for reviewing...it was a good review umm and i will try to fix that stuff

- the review response club

p.s. the guy busted his money on a huge clock, so he had to buy a small bed :P

[Ryu is Hawt]

Oh come on.

I do know that you didn't draw this for it to look good, it was for fun. I don't know why a lot of people have difficulty understanding this, of course you all know that Tom can draw 100 times better if he wants, he drew this badly so it would look funny. Everytime I look at this drawing, I chuckle, because of how silly Ryu was portrayed here. It's 2 times funny when you watch the collab.

I still deducted a point because some of his muscles were drawn weirdly. I don't know if you did that on purpose for some reason though. 9/10 and 5/5, good job!

[Cammy <3 :3]

Well done!

I always found Cammy good looking, and this art was really well drawn, good job!

I don't understand why her right eye can be seen behind her hair, though.

You should make one with Chun-Li, too, if you haven't.

animetor responds:

yeah the eye behind the hair is my kinda style.. I like it when you seen the full eyes if you know what I mean :D